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Re: To forgive, divine
like seeing for the first time. I think you can make this more direct by using the word blind somewhere in here. [s]but[/s] you can ' t have the brightest ...
Aug 27, 2006 -
Re: How to Avoid Sex Scenes
I think that's a great method! I also tend to describe more of the character's feelings, the inner thoughts, in those times - rather than the actual physical actions. Too ...
Aug 24, 2006 -
Re: Ashes, Ashes
This is how you feel the flow of fire, as it pulls you taut and graceful in stadium lights. Blare down at the brass instruments, bellowing the final tidal note ...
Aug 24, 2006 -
Re: Tossing Knives
Face paint makes our show that of inkblots. Tossing sabers and fire, talent burns the grass bare As we are behind circus curtains clandestine. Overtime, every pore erupts in sweat ...
Aug 24, 2006 -
Re: Balkline
One day I will learn to find Times New Roman as beautiful as the words I set down. I. You bleed fiber under a sweaty sun, perspiration dribbling from heavens ...
Aug 23, 2006 -
Re: Random Linden stuff
Sam glanced idly at the book she held, her search still fruitless after three hours. She had several books strewn about her, some falling off the small table in the ...
Aug 22, 2006 -
Re: Bubblejuice
Unspoken words, a thousand to think of, each chinks of ice thinning my blood; Steel souls form diadems, flavored saccharine. But as useless as the space between our heartbeats, I ...
Aug 22, 2006 -
Re: Haiku written in German
Okay, I guess my comment didnt go through. Ah, my husband, my treasure. I do not find the night dead. Separate romantically. I think the entire fact that it's german ...
Aug 21, 2006 -
Re: Character Answer Game
Warlord of Mystic. I happen to like my position. It's the only thing I'm good at. --Empri Do you have to ask? --Emperor Yes. It's called being God. It's very ...
Aug 21, 2006 -
Re: not even a farewell
I back these comments and, in addition: hid ing (den) in (behind) your eyes
Aug 21, 2006 -
Re: Hitching a Ride
*bites lip* Organ walls...like the walls of organs... You know, the intestine-y stuff. That was my point.
Aug 21, 2006 -
Re: good night sweet ladies good night
this skin here is parchment this blood here is ink and what rots is in this and in you This really doesn't have a point to it. Otherwise, this is ...
Aug 20, 2006 -
Re: Myspace!
Mine is
Aug 19, 2006 -
Re: Nine O'Clock in Gaithersburg
and lingua ignota between sap and blood ; I'd see this better with just a plain old period. (a) steadfast reminder of life before light. Since the "night" is a ...
Aug 19, 2006 -
Re: Shakespeare's Casanova
but forgive me, [s]now[/s] for i have sinned, [s]darling[/s] The occasionally "love" or "darling" adds to the perspective of the speaker, but extra words are reoccuring in your work. Just ...
Aug 19, 2006
